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This is a first working of this song, I suppose it's about the detachment Elvis might have been feeling when things were falling apart for him.
Any advice on improving it would be gratefully appreciated.
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Lyrics
The dirty sun is killing all the birds out on the trees,
Somebody told me
Air is pushing down on me
Sweat keeps breaking out I can't shake it off.
This living is an affliction
I can see what people say with just their eyes.

I'm falling out, out into space
Where is my silver cape
My blue suede shoes seem out of place.

Dr Nick should call today and help to chase this emptiness away for me
I recall one time when as a boy I thought the world was like a treasure chest.
Now my hands are shaking
I feel like something old thats going to break.

I'm falling out into deep space
I lost my golden crown
My blue suede shoes are a disgrace.

Have you ever felt that time keeps speeding up,
And leaves you without a reason
Have you ever held your newborn baby in your arms and cried.

I'm falling out, into deep space
Where is my golden crown
My blue suede shoes are a disgrace.


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Uploaded: Apr 25, 2007 - 05:57:25 AM
Last Updated: Apr 25, 2007 - 05:57:25 AM Last Played: Jun 24, 2017 - 08:09:19 PM
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Scott Carmichael said 3804 days ago (April 25th, 2007)
resignnation bordering on dispair
is captured well here.. I don't think I would change anything about the song structure... I love the chord changes into "I'm falling out" it twists the knife in just the right way... I sat and sang this a few times with you... there might be a few places where I would massage the lyric... but there a few opporunities to go for the juggler in the melody... just to provide that extra emphasis... this is really a great song to sing... and as I'm going about my work here in the office, the song is staying with me...
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announcer said 3804 days ago (April 25th, 2007)
Some exceptional ideas here
I find the ideas in this song well stated and interesting. I do feel that the song needs a little more finishing however. I like the modulation in the chorus but you seem to be searching for the melody just where you need to be at your strongest vocally. Frankly, this song is so good that it really deserves more attention and polish.

I hope you will consider some re-tracking and and re-mixing on this wonderful piece.
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Willywagga said 3804 days ago (April 25th, 2007)
Yup
Thats
just what I was doing, searching for the melody. I was very uncertain, where and how to sing the song. I intend to rework it, I had the idea for the song and as it started evolving I did not find the right defination in the melody, I kind of really wanted to belt it out, but just couldn't bring myself to that point, because of lack of definition I suppose. Thanks for the very constructive comments.
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said 3803 days ago (April 25th, 2007)
such a sad story
When I think about those hard times for Elvis, it makes me feel so sad. I think that your song lyrics describe what he must have felt like.
stevie_vids said 3803 days ago (April 25th, 2007)
Great
Fantastic recording, sweet guitar, nice and warm. I like the Johnny Cash feel
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echoroom said 3803 days ago (April 25th, 2007)
Thangyouverymuch
Ok - I think the verses are great, really emotional, but the melody in the chorus just isn't quite there yet - for me, it's just not as good as the verse.

i feckin' LOVE the lyric, the guitar is great, the arrangement and structure is good, but obviously work to be done on the mix (keys seems too quiet).

I think this is you best vocal Willie - this needs a bit more spit and polish, but is a gem of a song.

Steve
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Willywagga said 3803 days ago (April 25th, 2007)
Right on
Thanks for the thoughts Steve, you are right, I've been playing this song abit the last couple of days just me with the guitar, and have become more acustomed the melody in the song, because there's alot of uncertainty on this take. I will redo the vocals pretty soon, maybe redress the song. Thanks for your thoughts on it.
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jiguma said 3803 days ago (April 25th, 2007)
Mutant ballad :)
I mean that in the very nicest of ways Will. In different hands, this could have been a very smooth ballad, but your approach - call it uncertainty - to the melody and maybe also with the strings and bass, really makes this song for me. There are certainly bits of the melody that could be reworked a little, but I think you need to be careful you don't remove what makes this so special. Very good lyrics. Look forward to hearing the next version.
Cheers,
Neil
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echoroom said 3803 days ago (April 26th, 2007)
Spot on
Agree with Neils comments - this needs work, but not that much - the whole feel of this is really special ... it just needs a little push, not shoved in front of a train!

look forward to the finished version.

Steve
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DWL said 3803 days ago (April 26th, 2007)
Rather wonderful :-)
A beautiful piece or work Mr W.

I could hear someone like Tracy Chapman singing this. I love the lyrics and, for me at least, a stronger chorus would detract from the melancholic whole.

Nicely done.

Cheers

Dick
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guitapick said 3803 days ago (April 26th, 2007)
Beautiful tune...
I'm not well versed with the particulars of recording, yet...but I know that I like the way you're balancing your acoustic guitar/vocals with the shifting instrumentation in the background. Nice variations of sound that stay within the framework.
The lyrics are wonderful and your voice is just right for them.
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said 3802 days ago (April 26th, 2007)
Man!!!
This gave me goosebumps when the chorus came in. Excellent song writing. The lyrics alone stand as a work of art. Wonderfull song!!!!
lavalamp said 3802 days ago (April 27th, 2007)
love the guitar
Love your guitar and the chord changes, also nice build up during the song. Nice voice. I'd do something else with it though. It's a little too much out in the front(LOUD). Maybe just a touch of reverb and vol. down a hair and it would be perfect. Great lyrics.
LL
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Rebsie said 3802 days ago (April 27th, 2007)
What a great song
I really like the bittersweet tone to this, with the sadness and darkness being expressed through a charming and sometimes upbeat melody, which serves to magnify its impact big time. The chunky bass sound is very nice, and so is the overall dynamic of the song, which manages to be intense and laid-back at the same time.

This has the potential to develop into something pretty knockout, as it has all the elements in place. The only thing I would suggest is to make sure any future tweaks or reworkings don't compromise the honesty of your performance here, because it's that raw directness that makes it so powerful.

And as an aside, it's always nice to hear an Irish accent!
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Joe Brady said 3801 days ago (April 27th, 2007)
I like this a whole lot;
Maybe because I answered yes to the two questions you posed in the last verse. Well played, and I always liked your vocals, but especially like the little things like the whispered vocal on "shake it off," and that sweet pickin' lead. Really sounds great in my headphones. Be careful with this one Willie, it's special.
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musichead said 3801 days ago (April 28th, 2007)
great lyrics
I love the lyrics!! Well written song.
The bass seemed a bit thin to me. But I think that is
preference. I just like a deeper bass.
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dajama said 3799 days ago (April 29th, 2007)
Great song
This is a great song, with a powerful, affecting sentiment, and some sweet melodic guitar work. I agree with some of the comments about the meldody of the chorus, but I think it's really just a case of tweaking, changing a note here or there. There is a vibe here that you don't want to lose by too much fiddling about. Your vocal is one of the best things about the song, and the emotion in your voice comes across nicely. Bring the keyboards up maybe, turn the vocal down...I don't know. I'm not really qualified to advise! But I do know this is terrific work, and can only get better. Nice work.
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Doadars Uncle said 3798 days ago (April 30th, 2007)
Great presentation!
I like it as is! Cozied up in warm self degradation... I know people feel this from time to time.

Good tune!

Doug
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moorlandt said 3798 days ago (May 1st, 2007)
a little transposing...
I love the very intimate feeling of this song, and the whole performance reminds me to your masterpiece 'where isabelle played' (still one of my very favourite songs on this site). I have the impression that some lower notes are just a tiny bit too low for your natural voice range. If you're redoing it anyway, you might consider transposing the whole song by two or three notes. That should be perfect. The lyrics are wonderful with a mix of sadness and sarcasm.

- Walter
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bud said 2895 days ago (October 19th, 2009)
Man - this song just killed me
I had the player on and this grabbed me and wouldn't let go. What a great set of lyrics - and a really fine performance. I know exactly what you are talking about.
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