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(NOTE: I accidentally uploaded this song twice, so I deleted one of them. Thanks to everyone who commented though!)

I'm trying to expand beyond my comfort zone of slash-my-wrists-broken-heart songs, so this is a new attempt. This is just me and my trusty Takamine guitar, with some effects on both of course. Nothing dry for this girl.

I will welcome any comments and critiques from my respected fellow MacJammers! You guys always have great stuff to say!

Please keep in mind this is take one, and I do plan on reworking this a LOT!

Thanks so much,
Stacey K. Black
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FLAWED
Stacey K. Black

she stares into the mirror for a long time
cataloging every feature into assets or flaws
when she decides flaw well she just paints it away
when she decides asset then she can get through one more day

she tries to hide her pain behind a mountain
a mountain made of nameless faceless wastes of time
one by one by one they disappoint her
and even one more day of breath won't help her learn

breathe easy on your way up
breath easy on your way down
breathe easy cause we'll all fall
breathe easy cause we're all flawed

he thinks his own happiness lies elsewhere
he looks into every outstretched hand offered
and ultimately those hands come up empty
if he'd look into his own he might finally see

breathe easy on your way up
breathe easy on your way down
breathe easy cause we'll all fall
breathe easy cause we're all flawed

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Comments: 22
Fans: 19
Plays: 171
Downloads: 126
Votes: 7
Uploaded: Apr 06, 2008 - 08:28:14 AM
Last Updated: Apr 06, 2008 - 10:02:30 AM Last Played: Jan 18, 2017 - 06:57:21 AM
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Comments
Skean said 3458 days ago (April 6th, 2008)
Now you confused me
I must listen on your first post again have you done some thing to this?
or is it double posting? sounds same too me.. I just wonder any way I love your work.

Take care
--
Kenta
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MarkHolbrook said 3458 days ago (April 6th, 2008)
Oh my...
What a beautiful voice! Thanks so much for this! I'm gonna go and listen to your other stuff now! This is really great!
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echoroom said 3458 days ago (April 6th, 2008)
Cool
Hey Stacey ... that K. Black is sooo cool!

Anyway girly, this is gorgeous - beautiful signing... effortless and flawless. Really catchy chorus... this works acoustically and would also suit the full band and orchestra. Great song.
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stacey said 3458 days ago (April 6th, 2008)
Thanks!
Thank man! I'm planning on tackling it this week. Maybe some drums, a little live cello. That's always hilarious! I am NOT good at the cello, which is why it sometimes comes out great. But sometimes it sounds like a dying whale! haha!

Thanks everyone for your great comments!

Stacey
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ktb said 3458 days ago (April 6th, 2008)
we are all
flawed! but you deftly shed any concept of that musically with this amazing track. I do believe I have never heard her wonderful voice so expansive and heartfelt. This may be a first pass, but it stands proudly on its own as is.
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gail60 said 3458 days ago (April 6th, 2008)
what a great song
You have a terrific voice. Very confident sounding and soothing to listen to. Wonderful job. Thanks for sharing it with us.
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said 3458 days ago (April 6th, 2008)
hellagood!
stacey - your voice and the energy behing it is a wonderful gift. i think you're aces!

anne
magnatone said 3458 days ago (April 6th, 2008)
Flawed
wow - what a great song! Your voice is such a joy to listen to! Great lyrics - amazed this is a one take deal. I guess you could tweak this forever, but it sounds great to me right now, just as is!
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davisamerica said 3458 days ago (April 6th, 2008)
right then stacey
very nice tune ... all the way around and your voice is great!
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lavalamp said 3458 days ago (April 6th, 2008)
Nice pipes
Pro quality Stacey. Beautiful voice.

Great stuff. Nothing is wrong.

LL
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stacey said 3458 days ago (April 6th, 2008)
Thanks so much!
Thanks for your comments. I really appreciate them! If anyone has any suggestions how I can add to this piece, please let me know!

Thanks again,
Stacey
Check out my latest song called tick tock
racerat said 3458 days ago (April 6th, 2008)
miss black
Hey Stacey,
Beautiful. Thanks for the new one. I love your note about trying to get away from the slash-my-wrists genre. Bravo, this is totally going somewhere else. I love how you open up your lungs a bit on the 4th and 5th stanzas especially "on your way down" line. Really nice.

Because you know I have your best interests in mind, here is my constructive crit: I think that the Takamine sound it a little thin. It gets a little ploink-y and should have a bit more middle and bass EQ. Tha being said, what I think it might use as an additional element is a bass guitar coming in quietly at about the 4th stanza and then even possibly some strings--no I take that back--too melodramatic. Just the bass, to hold down the bottom end and add a bit of depth.

That's it. Loved it...

P


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stacey said 3458 days ago (April 6th, 2008)
yes!
Thanks Philip! I will work on that foe show! You know I love getting advice from accomplished musicians!
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Lennon714 said 3458 days ago (April 6th, 2008)
very cool
This is very cool. In fact, I think the vocals on this are stronger than some of your other work. Very powerful. I hear some simply flanged guitar (a la Twin Peaks). Good job!
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thetiler said 3458 days ago (April 7th, 2008)
Pleasant to hear the nice sounding strum
of the acoustic guitar. LIke how you blend the guitar so well with your terrific voice. LIke how you can use your voice to almost sound like a steel pedal guitar. Note sure how to make my words come up with the type of sound you make but it sure sounds wonderful.

Such a TREAT to hear such wonderful female vocal sounds here at MJ, I know i've praised your singing before on one not far back from this one, but really. You have a terrific vocal talent. And we MJers sure are lucky to have you here. Hope you can stay and that it is a long one!


Thanks for sharing
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said 3457 days ago (April 7th, 2008)
Very nice

Song. I also like your picture at the top.
You look very attractive.
Peace Dee.
Soundhound said 3457 days ago (April 7th, 2008)
Very Cool
You've good some nice Pipes as well....
Major Dynamics Vocally, Keep doing what your doing..
Cause you do have your own style....

I............LIKE IT...........
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ageofthedeathtree said 3457 days ago (April 7th, 2008)
wow
this is really cool stacey! love the effects, they really contribute to the mood of the lyrics. very well composed and very well performed. top notch song!

age
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Ed Hannifin said 3456 days ago (April 8th, 2008)
You've got great songcraft...
...and among assets, the gift of a great voice...

And what's cool in this song is to see and hear you being brave enough to stretch what you do while not going at it like a dilettante or doing it by abandoning taste altogether...

I really like the song as a song. The lyric and melody are great.

I'm with Philip in terms of enjoying the open voice as the song goes along. In fact, I'm with Philip pretty much right along... My main point of suggested tweakness remains the acoustic guitar sound... I'd just experiment with a halfway decent mic and changing the position a whole bunch until it gets that warmth-without-boom. The suggestion regarding some bass is also a good one. And, you know me, double it, or do a second strum with the guitar capoed somewhere so that you can pan it left and right and have slightly different sounds...

Ed
stacey said 3456 days ago (April 8th, 2008)
Thank you!
WOW! That is such a great idea for the double guitar track with the 2nd track capoed. I'll have to figure all that out... haha... it'll take me a little time, but I'll do it. I can't wait!

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Ed Hannifin said 3456 days ago (April 8th, 2008)
There's an article...
...with a nice, easy to use chart, all about capoes and capo use, in the current issue of Acoustic Guitar magazine... On your newstand now...
stacey said 3456 days ago (April 8th, 2008)
Ed!
Thanks so much for that great tip!

Stacey
Check out my latest song called tick tock
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